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I cut into my misery
The blade skims across my arm
Nothing could mend my teenage angst
But this self inflicted harm

Cutting and scraping
Until Iíve reached the bone
Why wonít you acknowledge me?
I feel so alone

The reflection I see haunts me
It drives me insane
I hate myself so much
I deserve to feel this pain
I wrote this poem in two days. They were not particularly good days either... I think if you read it, you will understand what itís about.
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cyril Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2006
This feeling you have is familiar. It is the burden the world has given our generation to carry. No body has had to deal with the types of problems we experience today. They are the same problems in essence, but how they show themselves changes. The dark abyss and the void, that stare back at you.
But most important is finding what you want to do. Doing IT, and taking that leap of faith to do it.
Good poem, it helps me a lot to pour my demons and deathraps on paper, then I see them otherwise a thought can not see itself.
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TormentednLost Featured By Owner May 4, 2004
i like this, reminds me so much of the past...
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Ramuel Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2004
That is a good one. Its all about the expression of emotion.
"Nothing could mend my teenage angst
But this self inflicted harm"
-great lines.
The word choice, the rhyming, everything is so well done.
I dont think anything could have been done better here.
So I guess I have to :+fav: this.
-Ramuel
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chibiboy Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2003
thats beautifully emotional :aww:
and so sad :hug:
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machine-gunner Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2003
I cant really relte to this..but i can say that it is a very strong poem :clap: (im also not a fan of the whole suicidal poem stuff)
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tneconni Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2003   Writer
Thank-you. I'm glad you liked it :D
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XscreamxmyxnameX Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2003
wow...really honest and emotional. I can really relate, i know exactly how that can feel...:-/. awesOme work
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notrust Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2003
Very nicely done....I can relate...:(
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Dragonic Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2003  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Wow..
I really love this poem.. I felt like this so many times... And still do.. Great stuff!!
:hug:
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Lailoken Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2003   Writer
Hmmm....I can sympathize with this...I'll have one up soon that almost mirrors it. Keep writing, I'm looking forward to more!
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tneconni Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2003   Writer
Thanks so much. I can't wait to read it, and I'll try not to dissapoint! :P
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copperhead2121 Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2003
Wow. How painful-honestly, I had a bad day and THAT didn't help. But it's a well-written piece. Very intense. But I suppose it's intense subject matter.
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markyrees Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2003
Hi, thanks for commenting on my poem :) I really like this coz its so simple.. but it still manges to be clever. lots of love, mark.
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tneconni Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2003   Writer
Thank-you! :hug:
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markyrees Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2003
:) hey ill check some of your work out a little later, made sure to bookmark your page :) lots of love from marky.
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dementedpoet646 Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2003   Writer
Really good poem. Just scares me cause I used to do that and it feels weird thinking about my past but when I look down at my wrist or at my legs i see the scars.
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tneconni Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2003   Writer
That must be a crazy feeling... Do you ever have the urge to do it again?
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dementedpoet646 Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2003   Writer
Sometimes I think about it but I dont really need to. I've come to realize there more important things in life that will get me through all the bad times.
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story2tell Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2003   Writer
beautiful. really well said and thought out... wow. beautiful.. i can relate to your every word, you have so much talent ::so much better at writing that me.. i'm jealous!:: just kidding.. definatly a +fav. keep on writing your feelings down, 'cause your result is amazing!

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this saddness is building up inside of me,
i can't take it anymore
i want to make my own red sea,
need some blood on the floor...
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story2tell Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2003   Writer
you're so welcome, they were very well earned.
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tneconni Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2003   Writer
Thank-you so much for your kind words.
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tambalt Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2003
thats really good. and it totaly describes the feeling.. well done
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skippingreelsofrhyme Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2003   Photographer
I love the last verse. I love all of it but especially the last verse.
And "nothing could mend this teenage angst" speaks volumes.
:D I'm going to have to put it in my favourites.
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tneconni Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2003   Writer
Thank-you!
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sundayschild Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2003
Thats beautiful, in a sad way...very well written. I like the...rhythm? to it. I understand this poem, meh, I know how you feel.

Great :)
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tneconni Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2003   Writer
Thank-you. And I'm sorry you know how I feel... it's not a good feeling
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xxxxxx Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2003
at least you acknowledge its teen angst.
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lilmejuju Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2003  Hobbyist Writer
ow...that sounds a little painful. And a little bloody. Gruesome. I like.
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GreenFrog Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2003
Yes, much love to you...
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tneconni Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2003   Writer
D
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tneconni Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2003   Writer
Okay that didn't work.... but thank you! I love you too.
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brandowilly Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2003
great poem!
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tneconni Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2003   Writer
Thank-you!
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blackrose321 Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2003
O_O wow, that's extremely good, very well written, self-explanatory, emotional....well done, :+favlove:
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tneconni Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2003   Writer
Thank-you for your kind words and the fav. :D
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Skypaws Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2003   Writer
Very beautiful. Well Written. Much better than my work. :3
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tneconni Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2003   Writer
Thank-you! And that is so not true!
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Skypaws Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2003   Writer
Are you sure? o_o;
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tneconni Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2003   Writer
Yup... positive!
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Skypaws Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2003   Writer
.. Okay .. If you say so. o.o!

-Writes another poem-

.. I need a title. It's like .. about a girl who looks into a mirror .. and sees a different person .. someone ugly.

Have a title?
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tneconni Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2003   Writer
Hummm.... *thinks real hard* i got nothing... but I'll keep thinking!
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Skypaws Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2003   Writer
Okay. Thanks. -Thinks also-
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s-ylMIND Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2003
very good work, very emotional
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tneconni Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2003   Writer
Thank-you! :D
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s-ylMIND Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2003
you're welcome
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Hanzgit Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2003
whoa :-o thats nuts... ^_^ its a good poem! and dark o_o
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tneconni Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2003   Writer
Thank-you! Hehe... nuts
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GreenFrog Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2003
You write beautifully, much emotions, which we share....

To Be Over


And you think
A cut
Will bleed the pain
Erase your memories
Alleviate your life?
How deep
Will you have to go
To end these dreams
Sever the tears
Deaden the fight.
And will you be able
To finally free yourself
Or, maybe itís just an illusion
These thoughts
That twists and breaks your mind.
How do you know whatís real
Do you see any color
Between the lines of black and white.
Are you even listening?

Do you feel me next to you?

I love you.
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tneconni Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2003   Writer
Wow, thanks so much. And, if that 'I love you' was directed towards me... I love you too! :D
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onyxabrasion Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2003
I like this poem, I really do. It's similar to the one I wrote called Poser; it's in my Gallery somewhere.

I do however, have one issue with this piece. You have a steady syllabic rythm going all through the poem and then you hit:
The reflection I see haunts me
It drives me insane

The first thing I thought was "Add 'fucking', It drives me fucking insane" That would pick the rythm back up and display angst well also. Just a thought. Well done. +Fav
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